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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems , as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Speaking regional
language
 in another country where
people
 are living would create essential social and practical
problems
 for emigrants . I agree with
this
 statement completely , In the following essay , the season for my agreement about migration issues will be discussed . There is
a
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 main reason for happening social matters for
people
 who have to speak fleeing
language
 in other countries. Apparently ,
ability
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 in speaking the mother tongue in another dozen is a fundamental need to have
conversation
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 or communicate to solve their matters and reach their needs.
Moreover
 , if
people
 can not have
a
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proper communication with the local public , some social
problems
 will appear for them .
For instance
 , cultural shock , some matters in shopping and education in an abroad can be examples for forcing to talk a foreign
language
. It must be
therefore
 argued that the more
people
 are had to communicate by regional
language
 in other soils where they are accommodating , the more social issues they will have.
Additionally
 , the practical hard are observed for migratory who force to speak the vernacular
language
 in the host countries.
Furthermore
 , it is necessary to find a suitable job in the destination country .
Also
 , employers tend to employ some employees or workers who have
a
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professional
skill
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 as
an essential factors
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 in employment. Vividly , indicating and explaining our abilities and talents to achieve the job positions need to know and talking the native
language
 in interviews which is difficult for emigrants .
For example
 , a person who tends to teach
in
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abroad can not be employed unless predominates in
local
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language
 and it is hard for him to compare whit a native person. So , it is prefered to use a local teacher.
Consequently
 , reaching folk positions in the alien societies is hard as the result of force to understand another
language
 and a sign of
technical
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 issue in the destination country . In conclusion , in my view , if
people
 migrate to another soil , they will have to speak locally and practical and social
problems
 will occur for them .
Also
 , these
problems
 are
vauable
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valuable
 as well as each other.
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