The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Six different pie charts relating to continents
reveals
Correct subject-verb agreement
reveal
show examples
the use of
water
in three different areas.
Usage
Correct article usage
The usage
show examples
of
water
is shown in percentages.
Overall
, it is evident that, out of the six areas of the world, four of them mostly use
water
for agricultural activity, which is more than 70 per
cent
.
On the contrary
,
water
used for domestic activities is recorded as less than 20% for all of them. Considering the usage of
water
for agriculture, we can clearly see that four continents namely, Central Asia, Africa, South East Asia and South America consume 88, 84, 81 and 71 per
cent
respectively.
On the other hand
, the rest two are below 40%. The least consumption of
water
is in the area of domestic activities which is ranging from 19% to the lowest 7%. In between the highest and lowest consumption, it is the industrial activities where the percentages of
water
are ranging from 5 per
cent
that is
recorded for Central Asia to 53 per
cent
for Europe.
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