3. Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. Discuss both sides and give your own view.

In today's globalisation, a highly controversial issue relates that many argue to give help needy
people
globally, while others believe that
there
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own
country
poor
people
need the funding
money
for
fulfulling
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fulfilling
their basic needs. In
this
essay, I am going to examine
this
question from both
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of view and
then
explain why I prefer every one of us should help their own
country
poor
members
and give a manifold justification.
Firstly
, many individuals nature is to help the poor needy
people
throughout the world without any
descrimination
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discrimination
.
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there intention is to spend their
money
on helpless
people
who are struggling in their lives and trying
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best to make them happy and
fulfill
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their fundamental needs.
For example
, my
aunty
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lives in Australia as her nature is helping he spend her 25% salary in Human Appeal Trust company who works and hand over the amount given by society who concern for poor
people
all over the world, which is
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sign for humanity. On other hand, others tend to feel that their charity fund should
be spend
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in their own
country
poor fellow
members
. Because they want
there
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country
should be developed by getting rid of poverty from the
members
who are financially weak.
However
, they want their
country
should be rich in all aspects by helping their own needy
people
. To illustrate, My friend always
concern
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about their nation poor families so, she
save
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her salary some amount of
money
and
give
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a
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charity to their own
country
poor
members
as they could get some help
them
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to survive. In conclusion, I would like to state that both
point
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of views
have
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their own merits. But personally,
i
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always give
a
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significance to our
country
poor
people
who have the rights to take our charity
money
for their
surviving
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as we all belong
one
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nation.
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