People living in large cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage them to move to smaller towns?

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most of the citizens are struggling with some of the negative aspects of
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he
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urban lifestyle. Some of them are related to the economic situation of the
cities
and others are related to
cities
development.
However
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personally I believe that there are several ways to move
people
to other
cities
. There are some factors that have a direct effect on the living condition.
First
and foremost high cost of living in big towns are significant high. job opportunity
are
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strongly decreased and due to the increasing demands of the society for
work
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they will be limited more and more, which lead
people
to the hard economic situation.
Moreover
, some of the issues
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from
traffic
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of the metropolises. there is a direct correlation between the amount of
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traffic and mental diseases. Many time
are
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wasted due to the traffic congestion and so much mental and physical brought for citizens. As result, many of them suffered from some illnesses
such
as heart attacks. But there are some practical ways which governments can carry out
for
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solve the problem and move them to other
cities
. If some of the opportunities and facilities are improved in smaller
cities
, many
people
leave the
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large
downtown. It means that
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government
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must provide some works and jobs for
people
because of a lack of enough works many of the
people
tend to immigrate to larger
cities
.
Moreover
, some big organisation must be moved to other
cities
. It means that, whenever we gathered around all of the important organisations of the country, the importance of the other
cities
are down, which can provide poverty and less attention. In many countries, capital
cities
are
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important
city
in all over the country. So it is
obviously
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, government pay attention to the
city
and increases the value of that
such
as
city
cleanness and
city
structure improvements. At
all
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there are many difficulties for the citizens in the large
cities
which can be reduced by some beneficial approaches from the government.
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