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Living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#cities #people’s #health
Nowadays living in
a
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huge
cities
 are
dangours
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dangerous
 for human beings
health
.
Other
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Others
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 argue that living in
a
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cities
a city
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cities
 have
an
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a
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 big
advantages
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advantage
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 as
financialy
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financially
financial
 and its near to many
services
. I will discuss
this
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my
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may
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my
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 opinion. 
Firstly
, living in
a big
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a big city
big cities
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cities
 has many good points.
For instance
, living in a city have economic benefits for
illustrate
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illustrating
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 that there are many jobs opportunities because there are
alot
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a lot
 of companies and
services
 that will haire many
employes
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employees
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 to work for them.
Furthermore
, living in a city has
also
 many advantages in part of all
services
 are near to you.
For example
, that if anyone needs any sort of
services
 like airports, huge malls,
govermental
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governmental
centers
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centres
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, large hospitals and many big
centers
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centres
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.
thus
 will be
esiear
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easier
 for
poeple
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people
 to accesses to those
services
.
However
, living in
a big cites
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big cites
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 have many cons
releated
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related
 to people
health
.
For example
, fossil fuel can be generated from industries and cars so will increase pollutions in
a
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cities
a city
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cities
 in compares with a small town
also
, its impacts on our
health
,
For instance
, level of carbon
dioxid
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dioxide
 it raised in
cities
 which has
a major effects
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a major effect
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 on lung and
polmunary
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pulmonary
 system. As well as, in
aspect
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the aspect
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 of trauma and injuries its increased due to
a large numbers
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a large number
large numbers
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 of populations To conclude that, as living in
a big
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a big city
big cities
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cities
 has
alot
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a lot
 of
health
consequnces
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consequences
also
 it has positive aspects. My opinion is that I agree that living in
big
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 city is bad for people's
health
 but
also
 there
is
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are
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 some benefits things.
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