"Prevention is better than cure" Out of a country health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Good health plays important role in human life.
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everyone because it helps to
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money and time.Nowadays, everyone is
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period of everyone in the world, that a corona period.
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disease.
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of money for treatment and
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family members
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their jobs.
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