Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of people thinking that wild

animals

should not be kept in

zoos

has risen a lot of debate.

In contrast

, others believe that there are good reasons for having

zoos

. On the one

hand

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wild

animals

should have the right as humans to live in their natural habitat, but

on the other

hand

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it could be a danger both for individuals and for them to live in crowded places. In the following

paragraphs

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I will discuss both

point

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of views.

Firstly

, it is crucial to be aware of the fact that

animals

should be considered as human beings

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because they are born and will grow up in

this

world.

Thus

, they

also

are part of our planet and should have the right to live in their natural habitat.

Moreover

, wild

animals

require specific climate conditions to survive and

thus

they cannot be held in

zoos

around the world, where the climatic requirements are not met.

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example

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Elephants should live in Savanas, where they can eat the right food and grow up in their appropriate living conditions.

In contrast

, others believe that wild

animals

could only cause danger and

thus

should be kept in

zoos

, where they can be controlled and used as an attraction. The main reason for keeping wild

animals

zoos

is to benefit from their uniqueness and rareness.

For example

, a lot of rare wild

animals

such

as Hippos are held in

Zoos

perserve

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preserve

their species.

However

, in my

opinion

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wild

animals

should be

sourrounded

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surrounded

by nature and be free to evolve their species without the control and influence of humans.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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