We live in a world of technology these days While the internet brings with it clear advantages the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages To what extent do you agree

Nobody would dispute the fact that the Internet has a lot of advantages and it helps us in daily task.While some people believe it could be dangerous and your private information can be stolen, I agree with them and hold the view that we must make more afford and create better security and establish control.
This
essay will discuss why we need to be attentive and careful when we use the Internet.
Firstly
, the Internet is huge and there is a big amount of useful and unnecessary material for kids.
For example
,
sites
for adults or videos of violence and killing people which has a very bad effect on the child.In order to prevent
this
, it is necessary to create high-tech systems that identify the child and prohibit entry. Parents should
also
monitor
this
but ,unfortunately now it is very open for kids.
Secondly
, when a child or adult visits
such
sites
, all data may be downloaded from the computer.
For instance
, it can be bank cards, info about where you live, remote access to your computer and video surveillance cameras. In my opinion, the
sites
and programs actually have more disadvantages than advantages, and to prevent computer hacking or other malicious action, you need to follow one rule, it is not to go to
sites
you do not know and download antivirus.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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