You recently did a short cookery courses a cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course write a letter to the coolest director at the cookery school in your letter describe what you enjoy about the course say how much cooking you have done since the course suggest another cookery course you do likes school to offer

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dear Sir or Madam ， I'm writing

this

letter to address how much I have enjoyed your cookery course the most incredible thing about your session was that it was very nice of you

forgiving

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for giving

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us a chance to present the signature dish from our countries. I was deeply touched and

the

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apply

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recommended your school to my friend because of it. after finishing the courses, I have tried on the techniques that chef Nicole taught us, and I have been working on my cooking skill three times every day. I even tried some new dishes since I have been followed

schools

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the schools

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official account on Instagram attachment are the pictures of the dishes that I have made. hope they

looks

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inviting to you. I can't help to notice that

healthy

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a healthy

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diet has become a trend recently. there are so many people

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who are

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now talking about it even fast-food restaurants are launched

low calorie

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meals. maybe the school could start a course in

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field. it’s going to be a big hit and I'm sure I will be joining the class. thank you for asking me for the feedback again. please keep me posted if there is anything new coming up. yours sincerely Sue

Submitted by Sue on Mon Oct 11 2021

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