In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

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There is no doubt that in many

civilations

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civilisations

civilizations

, parents tell their kids that can reach any goal by trying sufficient difficult ways.

However

, not all the aspects of

this

phenomenon have been negative,

although

there are certainly some advantages. There are several drawbacks of encouraging

children

to impact themselves to reach what they want. A common criticism for

this

message is that boosting will lead to bad results, which means that

children

might

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some impossible actions in future and results in facing some serious issues like sudden events

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their plans and projections to the future. Another negative prospect can be that while parents motivating their

children

to work hard, they might not know about their

children

's goals and purposes in their upcoming days.

Moreover

, most

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parents

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have already

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their

children

's future without asking them.

As a result

, the child can fail in his life after these

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days of studying and working.

For instance

, A recent study indicated that many people see that achieving

any thing

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anything

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easy

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an easy

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and simple method is

unimaginable

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an unimaginable

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thing and can not occur these days. In spite of these negative effects, giving

this

message has brought to us infinite

importants

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important

importance

benefits as well. One

such

advantage would be that it will reduce the amount of child's stress, anxiety, and depression and will increase the amount of his happiness, hope and having positive predictions in life. Thereby, the person can have a

higer

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higher

degree of excitement to reach his ambition. A

second

positive aspect could be that trying other people's hard success stories can lead to great consequences. A particularly good example here is that listening to the story of Albert

Enistein

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Einstein

how he was being weak in his school and after working so hard he became one of the most popular, interesting and famous

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in the world will promote

children

to apply his story as well. To sum up, while there are various drawbacks of

this

prevalent

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message

, it

also

brought to us endless advantages.

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon? • Technological improvements • Changes to education systems • Improvements to our diets Use specific details and examples in your answer. You may choose more than one cause.

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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.