Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Recently, some wild
animals
closed extinction are reported by media frequently. It is being argued by some people that the protection of wildlife should superior to addressing problems of humanity. I strongly believe that issues of both
animals
and
humans
can be solved concurrently. In
this
essay, why to address
this
problem of
animals
and mankind will be discussed.
To begin
with,
animals
play a crucial role in the eco-system that should be balanced normally. If
animals
extinct, the eco-system will be imbalanced.
Consequently
, a series of predictable events may be triggered, which eventually influence
humans
to thrive as we live with other creatures on the same planet.
For instance
, if the species of snow panther who is a kind of top position in the food chain near extinction, other species
such
as blue sheep and other
animals
who involved in the food chain will over-breed and over-pasture, which definitely pose a threat to the grassland and the headwater of rivers.
As a result
, countries and many people will be threatened by drought and lack of potable water.
Additionally
, many problems of humanity that need to be addressed urgently are time-consuming and costly, which should be concerned by countries and individuals.
However
, some issues of human beings can not get away from
animals
.
For example
, the COVID-19 pandemic that has been killing a huge number of
humans
links to wild bat possibly.
Hence
, we should hold a holistic view, and conduct a series of analysis for getting a deep understanding of the relationship between mankind and our neighbours. In summary, in my opinion, there is not an incompatible reason that the animal’s issues could not be attended alongside
humans
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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