Nowadays, families are not close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to it. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Technology has come a long way and globalization enabled people to be able to change their country of residence easier compared to the past. It is not unusual to hear people leaving their home countries to find better jobs or education opportunities somewhere away from home, causing
isolation
. In my perspective, not having
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relationship with families has more downsides than benefits due to the fact that
isolation
is the major cause of depression and addiction.
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of technology and globalization is the main cause of
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isolation
. It is becoming increasingly popular for
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new generation to get used to
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alone and cut their
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family
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connections
connection
.
This
can happen due to living apart which is mainly due to the
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process
of immigration. For in stane, these days, so many folks
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leave
their home countries to find a better life somewhere else.
This
can lead to not be able to visit their close families and friends for a long time and get busy with their own lives making money or going to school.
In other words
, they get used to
this
lifestyle after a while. Despite finding
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jobs and getting
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higher
education, these people
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not
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experience
happiness. After a while of living alone, they will become
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depressed due
to the fact that no friends can replace close family and be as supportive as parents
for instance
. In order to fight
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their
isolation
, they can get
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with some kind of addiction like drinking alcohol and using other illicit drugs to calm their pain. Later
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they can get addicted to these drugs not realizing the long term effects on their overall wellbeing and mental health.
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