In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a partuclar time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In today's society,

crime

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rate is increasing day by day and

as a result

, parents are afraid to let their

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children

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go out. US authorities took

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to impose a curfew for youth at

night

and if they want to go out, one adult must accompany them. According to my point of view, I strongly believe that

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it is a really good initiative taken by

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government to prevent

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involvement

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children

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in illicit activities. In the below essay, I would like to unfold the topics and provide relevant

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examples

to support my views. To commence with, criminal activity is one of the main concerns behind

this

restriction.

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this

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age, they are not enough mature to understand and choose what is right or wrong. Some of the recent studies

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that

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involvment

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involvement

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of youth in crime is more than 60%.

Furthermore

, they get easily influenced by some other person as an example, to earn money in

easy

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and fast way they choose

wrong

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path

such

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rotary

robbery

probably

by watching someone doing so.

Moreover

, it is often observed that, if parents are not paying attention towards them, they can become drug addict as most

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teenagers

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drugs are normal nowadays. Most of the time they

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consuming drugs with their friends

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parties and

night

clubs.

Hence

, imposing

this

night

curfew will help to stay away from

such

things.

In addition

, wild animals often

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disturbs

night

time as recently leopards and bears were reported in some regions,

thus

, they can harm teenagers if they were roaming alone. To put it in nuts shell,

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even though

, youngsters

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this

decision is taking their freedom away, I strongly

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opine

opinion

that is

a great step towards making

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safe which in turn will help to reduce

crime

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the crime

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rate.

Also

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I feel parents role is

also

important to help and shape their offspring future bright by helping them in making

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choices.

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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a partuclar time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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