Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others hold that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Top-level
employees
earn
realtively
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relatively
much more than regular staff in the big firms. Some argue that it is not fair for regular
satff
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staff
due to same labour time spend on the job,
however
,
this
believes that higher position staff should earn higher because of their skills and experience they have.
To begin
with,
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people in managerial positions have greater skills and knowledge required to run a business and manage people.
Moreover
, they acquire
this
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attributes with hard work, education and years of experience.
Furthermore
, they have the ability to think of bringing more profit to the organization and
suatain
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sustain
in a highly competitive market.
For example
, according to a study by Business Talk Newspaper, it
take
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of average 10 years for a basic staff to reach in the
top level
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position in an enterprise.
Hence
, the people who
holds
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the position of director should have
higher
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pay grade.
However
, many disagree and argue that there should be equal pay to all
employees
in the organization.
This
is to say that, all staffs of the company
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same
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amount of hours per week i.e. 38 hours and as they work
equal
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amount of time they should be paid at the same rate. Despite
this
, the
oridinary
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ordinary
employees
does
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not have the capacity, knowledge and skill in order to operate a business.
This
is considered as a greater responsibility in
same
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company. To exemplify, an office clerk may not have the ability to manage more than 200 staffs and handle
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operation of the enterprise. In conclusion,
this
essay believes that
higher level
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employees
should have a more income because of the expertise and skills they have despite the arguments that it
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to the lower level workers as they contribute the same amount of time in the office.
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