Some school have restricted the use of mobile phones. Do you think this is a negative development or a posititve one?

It is true that the usage of mobile
phones
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schools has banned. Personally, I believe that
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tilization of mobile
phones
negatively effects on not only learning but physical and social and I
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therefore
agree with
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prohibition
rules using mobile
phones
. I recognize the benefits of utilizing mobile
phones
in school one of which is that assists study of
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tudent. Thay can extend their knowledge with huge data on the Internet.
For example
, when teachers have
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ssignment for
students
, they can find ideas, information on the Internet.
This
is a good way to perfect their homework.
Nevertheless
, I realize the usage
phone
have more disadvantages than usefulness. Allowing mobile
phone
used in
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lassroom would result in cheating during the test or thinking
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positively
passively
. As an illustration,
students
can search for any questions with
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obile
phone
.
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Furthermore
,
students
maybe reduce
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oncentration level if they always gaze on their
phones
.
As a result
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earning outcome can be decreasing rapidly. And using
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obile
phone
too much in school, especially in break time, would impact student’s outdoor activities. They would connect with their friends by gaming, communicating,…
instead
of
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lone with their
phones
. They would have more close-knit relationship, widen their association and
develope
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develop
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their physical by sport
excercises
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exercises
. In conclusion, I totally lean on that some schools have interdicted the utilize of
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obile
phone
because of its
disavantages
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disadvantages
on
students
.
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