You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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Dear sir, I am Kailash kamble studying

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2nd-year civil engineering. I am writing

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cafeteria facility because I am using

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2 years along with my two best friends. We spend more time in a

college

canteen for

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because we don't have another choice. The cafeteria area is very interesting and attractive along with light background music and Warm wall colours along with cartoons and caricatures

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it more and more engaging. It is appealing for

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young generation. Cleanliness and prompt service

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impressive.

However

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quality is not that great in the terms of teste and quantity. Many students raise

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issue regularly in

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book but

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there is no improvement.

College

Course fees along with hostel charges

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expensive for many students

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improvement in a system really help them at a great level. I will

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to you if you can solve

this

issue on priority by publishing

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review information in a magazine. I

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are different people from

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different

culture

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around the world at one place but

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at least

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quantity issue could be solved. We spend more time in a

college

canteen for

food

because we don't have another choice. The cafeteria area is very interesting and attractive along with light background music and Warm wall colours along with cartoons and caricatures

makes

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it more and more engaging. It is appealing for

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young generation. Cleanliness and prompt service

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impressive. Look forward to positive improvement. Your's faithfully, Kailash Kamble

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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Some people claim that the government should provide free health care. Others think that the government will not provide the most innovative methods of treatment and it's better to invest those funds in education and culture. What is your opinion?

Many societies has its homeless people some people think that the best way to help them is give them money. To what extent do you agree?

Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views.