Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Technology
in the form of development is very important for human. Because
,
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it can create
such
facility of our
life
standard which is not available in other sources. Because of
technology
, nowadays people find a new way to connect with other people. There are many ways
technology
affects our relationships, in my opinion
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it is beneficial for ourselves. In today’s increasingly progressing world, human
are
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more interact with people because of
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nternet. People
are not only makes
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new friends in their region but they are
also
connected with foreign people. Internet
change
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the whole world and makes it like a small village. Now, people from around the world reach each other within seconds.
For example
, a friend who lives in Bangladesh can easily interact with his international friend through chat and video call. Which is not available in the past.
This
is happens
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because of modern
technology
.
Besides
that, nowadays, most of the people working outside . But , they are still can communicate with their family very fast.
However
,
technology
makes a positive impact
in
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our
life
. Human
life
are
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now
more easy
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than
as
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it was. Today now, we are more connected with our friends and family. Even, We can share our
life
stories with everyone through
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ocial platform.
In addition
, people are very busy these days , but, still
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they have time for all because of
technology
.
Finally
,
technology
makes
a huge changes
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in people’s lives. No matter what, I think, it is a blessing for all to get touched with each other.
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