It is quite common for both parents in a family to work. Sometimes this is because they need two salaries to survive whereas other times it is their choice. What are the problems you see in this situation? How does this affect the children and the family life?

There has been a drastic increase in the cost of living all over the world. It has become quite common that
both
parents in a family to
work
to accommodate these high living costs. Some parents do
this
purely for their survival, whereas some parent does
this
because of their interest in their jobs.
Although
, having two salaries can improve the families lifestyle, it
also
has a negative impact on their children, and
also
the bonding between life partner.
Firstly
, if
both
the parents go to
work
they have less time to spend together which in turn disturbs the family bonding and relationships.
For instance
, there was a survey conducted on some families in Korea, where some families have
both
the parents working and some families have only one person working.
This
research has shown that the families where only one parent is working were able to form a strong relationship, whereas the families where
both
the parent's
work
were not happy and their bonding was weak.
Secondly
, children of the families where
both
the parents
work
might suffer from loneliness and depression. Children need
attention
from parents to grow strong mentally and physically. Children need
attention
from parents to grow strong mentally and physically. Children need
attention
from parents to grow strong mentally and physically. Children need
attention
from parents to grow strong mentally and physically. To conclude,
although
earning money is important for survival, spending time with our partners is
also
important to have a healthy relationship and bonding.
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