You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems. Write a letter to the manager of the museum. In your letter, say why you visited the museum describe the problems you faced suggest what can be done to avoid those problems

Dear Sir
ir
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or
Madam, I am writing regarding a
museum
service. I have recently visited your
museum
with my mother-in-law who turned seventy
last
week. She has been living in Kyiv for forty years but has not gone sightseeing yet.
Therefore
, I decided to assist her and choose your
museum
first
thing due to the fascinating exhibition which you provide. Having a tour throughout your
museum
we felt as if we were in a
fairytail
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fairytale
and everything could have gone well if there is not one problem.
In other words
, my mother-in-law has weak legs and is unable to be on foot for a long time.
Thus
, she was required to have a rest but, unfortunately, there were no chairs or sofas or anyone else to sit. If you do not mind, I suggest you establish a lounge zone. It might be in the lobby on the
first
floor.
Moreover
, if you did
this
, it would create a pleasurable atmosphere and entice new visitors to your
museum
.
This
would exhibit your care about all your customers regardless of their age. I look forward to hearing from you soon. I wish
this
matter would be taken into account. Yours faithfully, Helen Myslitskaya
Submitted by myslitskaya.e on

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