Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money.Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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overnment is investing
money
on arts and public services.ln my opinion,more
money
should be spent on public services and little on arts. On one hand,it is important for
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overnment to invest more
money
on public services.Because these are hospitals,roads and schools which determine the quality of our lives.Taking Nigeria
for example
,
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funds
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being budgeted on health and education and as
such
it has increased the queue
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treatments and fewer teachers both of which can have
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dverse effect on our future lives.
Hence
,it is vital
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overnment
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pend more
money
on public services as it is the only way to maintain standard and accessibility to all.
On the other hand
,
money
spent on arts is not a
wasteand
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waste and
wasteland
must not be neglected.
Firstly
,many arts institutions cannot function solely on their own.They cannot generate all the funds needed because people are not prepared to pay high entrance fees for places
such
as art galleries and theatres.
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, without
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such
places will have to close.
Also
, many people derive great pressure from going to see music and theatre performance.ln addition, performing arts and literary arts
such
as dance and books help to preserve our culture and keep history alive for
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uture generation. In conclusion,
although
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ajority of
government
budget should be spent on public services,
government
spending
money
on arts is not useless and should continue.A balance is required to ensure public services are maintained and arts
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available to all.
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