You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems. Write a letter to the manager of the museum. In your letter, * say why you visited the museum * describe the problems you faced * suggest what can be done to avoid those problems

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Dear Sir, I have recently visited your museum with my aunt who is 80 years old. The main reason for our visit was to see the new artefacts which arrived

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Monday.

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, my aunt has

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interest in war painting and your museum is designed for

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. While we enjoyed every

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, my aunt had difficulties moving between different floors. The reason for

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is, the elevator was out of function and there wasn’t any other way.

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that, she had to use stairs all the time. We all know that at the age of 80 it is not an easy task. To resolve, it is essential to at least provide

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and make

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for it. So,

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or elderly can easily move between different floors.

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, it is best for everyone’s interest, if you can speed up elevator repair work. Thank you in advance, Yours faithfully, Jessica Pearson

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