Many people think that students should be allowed to choose the subjects that they study in school, whereas others feel that they should study a set curriculum. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

many people think that students should be allowed to choose the subjects that they study in
school
, whereas others feel that they should study a set
curriculum
. discuss both views and give your opinion. choosing
of
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school
subjects recommended done by students that thinking of some people. on the other side, people have a notion on that topic in contrary view so students have to stick on their studying
curriculum
which is obtained by their
school
.
this
essay will examine both sides of the argument and provide an overall opinion. generally speaking, there is a number of reasons why believe people that students have a chance to select their subjects. perhaps the main reason why people think that students who can opt their subjects
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because they find a chance to select their interested subjects,
thus
, they may have a more
concentrations
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of their classes that
brings
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up happy students profile who love to go
school
every day, no compliment about
school
and more achievement on their subjects. despite these arguments, many people feel that students have to stick their
curriculum
which
provide
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by their
school
. students always looking for their
favorite
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classes but if you don’t get fundamental of computers
then
you cannot
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in advanced computers class which provide set out a gaming project.
school
always obtain an experienced
curriculum
which suitable for every
students
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.
however
, it may
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some students who have no interest
with
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a subject but have to take
these
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subject and
then
they can distract other classmates and teacher with their attitudes. ın conclusion, it must be said that
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election of their
curriculum
or no selection
have
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become a complex issue with no easy solutions. personally, ı prefer to students have
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opportunity to select their subjects with pre-information which is provided by ancient students that will give
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more energy to easily focus on their subjects. ıf government want to do
that is
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roject,
first
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they have to
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on a pilot
school
then
with knowledge acquisition on that project they may apply
other
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another school
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school
efficiently.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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