“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

In
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ertain illness, it is always lucrative if we take precautions. I totally agree with both the assertion because of
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conomic issue for any country and awareness amongst humans regarding consuming suspicious food. Detail justification is being provided in the following paragraph.
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many of the developed
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spends hefty amounts of their currency in
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dvancement of medical science. Probability of trials getting succeed
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drastically low which eventually affect other factors of flourishing the nation
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the localities had to face issues
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ncrease in taxation as well as
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nflation rate,
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whereas
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of those local might lose their statue in
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nternational market.
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most of their money in medical research but when
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icture, they we affected widely due to financial
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capabilities
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Secondly
, obesity is significantly rising among youths in
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certain weight loss surgery, they are becoming more careless and consuming junk food.
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type of meal will eventually put them at greater risk of chronic diseases and might end up their life even without
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fulfilling
their dreams,
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it is always recommended to do regular exercise which is a best possible remedy amongst all add and if possible, maintain calories intake.
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outine exercise which made them healthy. Recapitulating all the above points it is evident that awareness amongst precautionary measures is must for youths as well as any nation. I completely opine on the same as
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will indirectly hamper many activities of mankind in
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mighty world
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government should amend certain policies regarding same.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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