You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Manager, I am writing

this

letter in regards to the recent notice about the practice in your community hall. Our group of

musician

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does rehearsal every week only on Tuesday and Friday evening. The music always relax and calm people, it touches the hearts and we do not make noise at all; it is sometimes the loud drum sound.

However

, we do not only earn from the music, but our group is singing in the church every Sunday and 50% of our events

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goes to the Vicotria Orphan House, where kids are getting shelter, education and food.

Although

, music plays a vital role in our society as well as it changes

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and fills it with positivity, sometimes motivates

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dishearten

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people. Along with

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, we kindly request you to arrange any other day for the practice session, as

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community hall is nearest to our group members’ residence and not so heavy on our pocket like others in the town. Yours truly Vishal

Submitted by MK on Thu Oct 14 2021

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