All over the world , societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

It is irrefutable that, lifestyle has undergone drastic changes over a couple of decades.
Obesity
becomes the common problem across the world.Fat should be removed We
also
should discuss the problem. We
also
should discuss the problem. Some are fat, some are not, some should be observed their health. Some should
also
look into themselves and find their selves into mirrors. All should discuss about the fat. Fat is not good for anyone. There are
number
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a number
of problems related to fat. There are some solutions we should discuss about fat and other hygiene dilemma of the fat.Solution are number of we should discuss.
Moreover fat
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Moreover, fat
is not good there are statistic of exercise overall approach of holistic development there are
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some
of diseases of cause of fat. In conclusion, we should discuss about fat in our daily life and we should think about life and other
obesity
issue, so at
last
we should see are certain steps related to
this
obesity
. There are figure of reasons of
obesity
of fat, but due to total of government issue we should think about the fat. Fat is not good for everyone knows about
obesity
and we should think Fat is not good.
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