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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with situation?

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Nowadays, many professionals,
such
 as medical staff, faculty at university, engineers, etc. Are leaving their native
country
 and migrating to developed countries in order to improve their living standards. In
this
 passage we would discuss about the problems they have to
face
 and their possible solutions. There could be "n" number of reasons why a
person
 migrates from his or her native
country
 to a developed
country
. The primary reason why an individual moves from his or her native
country
 to a developed would be less resources available from them, even if they have enough amount of resources they are not allowed to utilise them as the government wants to save those resources for future needs. The
second
 reason for an individual to migrate would be economy of the
country
 as in today's world, one of the basic requirements for survival is money and
last
 reason for an individual migration could be the biased result they
face
 whenever they apply for jobs or education. The
person
 who migrates to a developed
country
 has to
face
 many problems as the life of the
person
 changes completely.
Initially
, perosn has to
face
 problems until he or she completely adapt to the culture of the developed
country
 because if they fail in doing so,
then
 there are changes that would find themselve alone, which could led to building up mental stress another problem which an migrant could
face
 would be getting in jobs as the
person
 isn't well aware of the culture and the language of that
country
. In my opinion, the government of the developing countries should make sure that there should be no biases result in the education field or the industry as
this
 would make the
person
 who wants to migrate stay in his or her native
country
 and use their qualification in order to make their
country
 excel globally.
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