The first smartphone was released in 1992. By then year 2020 there may be as many as 2.5 billion smartphones in the world. The use of smartphones is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology and not our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We live in a world where

smartphones

have become an integral part of daily life

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and over the years the dependency on these devices became a reality

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Personally i

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Personally, I

Personally I

partly agree with the argument that the use of

smartphones

is playing a big role in the

reliancy

certainty based on past experience

reliance

on the technology and decrease the dependency on our

mind

On the one hand

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smartphones

bring

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brings

many benefits regarding how to get the information easily and in the fastest way

with

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access to

internet

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the internet

almost all the time

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Therefore

, the human brain has more access to

significant amount

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a significant amount

significant amounts

of data

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For example

, if someone wants to search the history of a

definite

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defining

era in the human life

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he will get that piece of information very easily

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Because of all the aforementioned human intellectual has become more

broadend

bearing a heavy burden of work or difficulties or responsibilities

burdened

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On the other hand

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the daily use of

smartphones

has bring

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has brought

laziness and dependency on these gadgets making people do not exert any effort to remember or rely on their

mind

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For example

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there are a lot of times when we use the calculator on our

smartphones

to do

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doing

a very simple calculation, and when we try to remember any information about any subject we directly ask for the help from google

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In conclusion

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although

smartphones

has become

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have become

a great assistance to our

mind

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it shouldn't make us more dependent on their help

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So we can have a full benefit

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a giver or sender

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our great

mind

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The first smartphone was released in 1992. By then year 2020 there may be as many as 2.5 billion smartphones in the world. The use of smartphones is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology and not our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The users of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Scientists predict that cars will be driven by computers, not people in the near future. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Educationists think that international exchange visits are important for teenage school students. Do you agree?

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?