Spending public money to promote healthy lifestyle that leads to improve the quality of life is better than spending it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The bar graph demonstrates the percentage of males and females and four different
age
groups of people watched the
reality
TV programs and
game
shows in Australia. It is explicitly observed that 70% of female watch the
reality
shows, which is almost double as many as men, who choose to watch the same genre of TV programs.
Moreover
,
this
genre of shows is popular among all the
age
group people. The proportion of people watching
reality
shows increases steadily from ages 16-45 with the lowest percentage of viewers, at just over half of the
age
group 16-24 and the highest percentage, at approximately 68% of over 45.
On the other hand
, the pattern is different from
game
shows. Almost same proportion of males and females watch the
game
shows, which is 60%. The amount of games, programs watch by 24-44 years old is significantly lower than the number of watched 16-24
age
group and those over 45. Just over a half
percentagepercentage
of people watches
game
shows, but,
this
ratio is decreasing at almost 30% between 25-34
age
groups. 70% of over 45
age
people watch
such
shows, it is the highest proportion of people watches
game
shows and
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
share of 35-44 year old is dramatically demanded even lower at 41%. Overall, it is observed that women watch genres of show compared to the men. Most of the people prefer to watch the
reality
shows rather than the
game
shows. People, who watch the television or in 45 years or above it.
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