more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. what are the reasons for this? what can be done to solve this problem?

It is true that
large number
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a large number
large numbers
of animals are
extincting
nowadays and part of them have already died out.
This
is mainly because of poaching
on
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of
rare animals.
However here
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However, here
are a number of possible solutions which can be implemented to protect endangered animals.
To begin
with, the main reason for
this
problem is a result of global warming.
In other words
, it causes ocean acidification, which negatively effects on marine life.
Also
loss of natural habitat is a consequence of climate changes. What
is more acts of hunters play
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is more acts of hunters playing
does more acts of hunters play
has more acts of hunters played
are more acts of hunters playing
have more acts of hunters played
are more acts of hunters played
is more acts of hunters play
vital role in
extinction
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the extinction
of rare animals, as they kill them for commercial purposes. Current survey carried out at Colorado University has revealed that more than 100,000 of African
elephant
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elephants
were hunted by poachers in 2018.
Nevertheless
, there are
ew
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'a'; a small but indefinite number
few
effective ways to solve the problem of
animal’s
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the animal’s
dying out.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
governments
should implement
strict law
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strict laws
against hunting on rare animals and selling it on
black market
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the black market
.
Also if
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Also, if
high
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higher
fines for buying products from endangered animals were introduced, demand for them would decline by 76%.
Secondly
, we ought to protect natural habitat by way of creating preserves and stop deforestation. According to the latest publications, 6,500 square
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
of Amazon Rainforest were cut down in 2019, what has led to
final extinction
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the final extinction
a final extinction
of Spix’s
masaw
long-tailed brilliantly colored parrot of Central America and South America; among the largest and showiest of parrots
macaw
.
Finally
, humanity must take action
about
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on
global warming in order to stop dying out of nature,
as it harms to
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as it harms
animals and us. In conclusion, while
extinction
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the extinction
of animal species is a serious threat to
biosphere
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the biosphere
and environment, there are a number of steps that can be taken to solve
this
issue.
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