more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. what are the reasons for this? what can be done to solve this problem?

#animals #verge #extinction #list

It is true that

large number

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a large number

large numbers

of animals are

extincting

nowadays and part of them have already died out.

This

is mainly because of poaching

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rare animals.

However here

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However, here

are a number of possible solutions which can be implemented to protect endangered animals.

To begin

with, the main reason for

this

problem is a result of global warming.

In other words

, it causes ocean acidification, which negatively effects on marine life.

Also

loss of natural habitat is a consequence of climate changes. What

is more acts of hunters play

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is more acts of hunters playing

does more acts of hunters play

has more acts of hunters played

are more acts of hunters playing

have more acts of hunters played

are more acts of hunters played

is more acts of hunters play

vital role in

extinction

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the extinction

of rare animals, as they kill them for commercial purposes. Current survey carried out at Colorado University has revealed that more than 100,000 of African

elephant

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elephants

were hunted by poachers in 2018.

Nevertheless

, there are

a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'a'; a small but indefinite number

few

effective ways to solve the problem of

animal’s

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the animal’s

dying out.

Firstly

government

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the government

governments

should implement

strict law

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strict laws

against hunting on rare animals and selling it on

black market

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the black market

Also if

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Also, if

high

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higher

fines for buying products from endangered animals were introduced, demand for them would decline by 76%.

Secondly

, we ought to protect natural habitat by way of creating preserves and stop deforestation. According to the latest publications, 6,500 square

kilometers

a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)

kilometres

of Amazon Rainforest were cut down in 2019, what has led to

final extinction

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the final extinction

a final extinction

of Spix’s

masaw

long-tailed brilliantly colored parrot of Central America and South America; among the largest and showiest of parrots

macaw

Finally

, humanity must take action

about

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global warming in order to stop dying out of nature,

as it harms to

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as it harms

animals and us. In conclusion, while

extinction

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the extinction

of animal species is a serious threat to

biosphere

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the biosphere

and environment, there are a number of steps that can be taken to solve

this

issue.

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