Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists. Support the reasons and examples from your experience.

The 21th century is the century have been known biology century, so scientists is one of really important things that human have to focus on. But teenagers they think that entertainers are more important than research that can help the society increase. In my opinion, I think
that is
the terrible ideas that people have to change. Entertainers are the person who brings the entertainment to people around the world. That can help people relax after hard days.
For example
, watching to the idols and their songs make us happy and feel comfortable, it can help us to rest our mind and do the job well but teenagers and children thinks wrong about that. They can watch their idols every day, but they can read the research that can help them increase their mind. The scientist is one of the most important and hardest things that there just a tiny of people can pursue patiently. But when we approach that it will open new way that make our mind increased, make us feel confident and receive more knowledge that help us in real life than watch something that's entertaining,
for example
knowledge about cancers helps us avoid its make our life become better, healthier.
Otherwise we
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Otherwise, we
can be easily have cancer. To sum up we have a huge knowledge about science, life is easier than just imitate something that unreal.
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