Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

I agree that
music
can bring people from different cultures and ages together. In general, it is difficult for people of different cultures and ages to get together and build trust with each other. I think
music
is a good bridge. Why
music
can be a bridge between people? Because
music
creators are born in the
music
to give emotion and life. People who have the same life experiences or perceptions are particularly prone to resonance.
Music
can be a good communication tool to convey emotions through the rhythm. In China, there are many ethnic minorities,
such
as the Yi people in Taiwan, who express their emotions through
music
. Many outsiders come to the place and quickly blend in through their beautiful songs and feel their hospitality.
Furthermore
,
music
is borderless, And the people who love them
also
break boundaries, whether it's religion or culture or age, it doesn't important. In my hometown will
holding
Suggestion
hold
regularly
Suggestion
regular
classical concerts. There will be many people of different ages and backgrounds and even foreigners
Accept space
,
,
they can communicate happily and even gain friendship. So, wherever you are,
music
is like a magic to bring different people together.
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