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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global sporting events which interest several nations around the world are a remarkable opportunity to demonstrate to other countries all the positive features of the hosting
nation
.
However
, these massive events are always linked to a large amount of
money
 spent and
therefore
, some individuals claim that these huge expenses are often unnecessary and exaggerated. All in all, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 
Firstly
, international sporting events
such
 as the Olympic games, which are being held every 4 years, are an extraordinary source of income for the
nation
 since visitors always come from different countries around the world and
consequently
 they are willing to spend lots of
money
 on accommodations, foods and entrance tickets.  According to my own experience, in 2006 I came to London with my family to see the Olympic games and we had to spend much
money
 in order to find an accommodation, close to the Olympic stadium and
first
 of all to be able to purchase the tickets.
Additionally
, another main advantage for the hosting
nation
 is that through these international sporting events, the local community which includes the local shops, restaurants and residential areas can gain fame around the world and therfore with the sum of
money
 earned, the governament has the opportunity to remodernize and retrain the area. A clear example, could be Stratford in East London, since it has been redeveloped over the years after the Olympic games and
as a result
 new modern buildings
such
 as the massive shopping centre have been built. To conclude, I absolutely agree that hosting international sporting events can be very challenging for a
nation especially
Accept comma addition
nation, especially
 in financial terms, but
on the other hand
, the notoriety that the
nation
 can gain and all the
money
 earned through hotel bookings, foods, gadgets, are surely much more valuable.
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