Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your opinion.

Currently, sharing a lot of
information
as much as possible in research, business and the academic is great.
However
, some people do not think like that, they think that some
information
is too vital to
share
out. In
this
essay I will give both these view and give my opinion on
this
topic. People use technology all the time, especially on social
network
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networking
,
therefore
some
information
or news are
spead
distribute or disperse widely
spread
quickly.
This
brings to one of
advantages
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the advantages
of technology that people can know or learn lots of thing easily
also
many people extremely love to
share
every
information
that they know.
For example
, the news that some countries have begun to do the research of anti medicine for COVID-19, many reporters want to know about the detail and
share
this
news to people
then
the
next
hour, most people know
this
research.
In contrast
, some
information
is very important to
share
because they are organisation
privatcy
the quality of being secluded from the presence or view of others
privacy
such
as the trade price of the company will drop
therefore
some people want to
share
this
by positive intention, but it is not allowed to do that and it seems like to break the rule and regulation.
That is
why not every
information
can
share
freely. Conclusion, sharing
information
is good, but people have to control themselves. In my opinion, some
information
is too valuable to be shared freely. People need to think a
lots
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lot
about how
confidential
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confidentiality
of that
information
before sharing them
also
have to know
that is
good for
themselves
objective case of they
them
or not if they
share
that
information
because that
information
are going to spread widely.
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