Some people feel that music should be taught in schools while others believe it is better to focus on the sciences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, education is an integral part of everybody's life.

However

, there are some arguments about

importance

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the importance

of each subject. On the

one

hand, a

plethore

extreme excess

plethora

of people

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opines

that

music

is crucial in

studying process

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the studying process

. Without a doubt, that subject may possibly have

extremely positive impact

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an extremely positive impact

on future generations. With learning

music

, children will be more intelligent, because they will have general knowledge which

one

is high-quality sound and which

one

is useless,

as a result

, it may alleviate a quantity of future singer, who would produce unsatisfactory content.

For instance

, there was an article which

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make visible

revealed

reveals e

reveals

that adults who studied

music

at school in

comparisone

the act of examining resemblances

comparison

with those who did not, had higher the IQ level.

On the other hand

, there is a strong view that science is the most essential. Indeed, Physics, Chemistry, Biology and Math are

indispensible

not to be dispensed with; essential

indispensable

during every child's education. A numerous of

usefull

being of use or service

useful

skills may be developed with

help

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the help

of those subjects

such

as logical thinking and solving problems

Accept space

Furthermore

, science is everywhere, it is connected with every aspect of

everbody's

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everybody's

everybody

life.

For example

, in

one

popular TV show, a group of scientists showed how a car tire can be replaced with

help

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the help

of general laws of physics. They used minimum of equipment. Personally, I believe that it is important to study a wide range of subjects at school.

Consequently

, that will help children to understand what they are

pasionate

having or expressing strong emotions

passionate

about and it will be

usefull

being of use or service

useful

in future choice-making procedure about occupation.

As a result

, there will be more happy society. In conclusion,

music

helps to have better taste and be more intelligent, whereas sciences may help to solve some every day issues.

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Some people feel that music should be taught in schools while others believe it is better to focus on the sciences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?