Some people think that children should not watch television as it has negative effects while some people believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is suggested that watching
television
has negative influence on children, even though others argued that media programs has
positive impact
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a positive impact
positive impacts
. From my point of view,
television
provides a lot of benefits and raise knowledge among children.
However
, kids must be monitored by parents and censorship from authority about elements presented to children. On one hand, it is undeniable that
television
has been
revolutionary idea
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a revolutionary idea
since it was invented and still the most popular innovation media programs is not
only source
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the only source
of entertainment and
enJoyment
the pleasure felt when having a good time
enjoyment
among
individuals but
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individuals, but
also
free flowing of information and knowledge through watching documentaries, educational programs and breaking news.
Similarly
, it will improve language skills by watching films with subtitles and promote curiosity to explore new culture.
Furthermore
, it is
affordable hobby
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an affordable hobby
among families who don’t have enough money to engage in outdoor activities.
Besides
, it will help to strengthen family bonding when they are involved to watch it all together.
On the other hand
, it has
determental impact
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a detrimental impact
detrimental impact
on
children which
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children, which
can be explained through
maJor
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
factors.
Firstly
, watching
television
for long period of time is always
accompained
having companions or an escort
accompanied
by eating unhealthy food
suchas
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such as
fastfood
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fast food
, nuts and dessert that have
high level
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high levels
a high level
of fats and sugar cause obesity which,
inturn
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in turn
, leads to a lot of health problems.
Secondly
, it is observed that media
contains
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contain
a lot of violence which has
exert
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exerted
a serious threat on
behaviour
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the behaviour
of children, it becomes more aggressive and tend to commit crime.
Last
but not the least, more time spending on Tv, less to interact with surrounding which incite children to be rather introvert. To
sumup
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sum up
, despite the popularity of TV has achieved and benefits are provided to children, there are some drawbacks they must
considerite
showing concern for the rights and feelings of others
considerate
considered
and take their precautions to avoid any negative influence.
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