"Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

Many people are of the view that research projects and finding cute to diseases are capital intensive and think that the most effective approach is to explore some other precautionary methods.
However
, I completely agree with
this
opinion I
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opinion, I
also
believe that health education. Healthy diets and regular exercises are
more better
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best
better
. In recent times the world had been plagued with an overwhelming
varieties
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variety
of diseases and infections which in turn has brought about illnesses, reduced life expectancy, high death rates and ultimately decline in population. Consequent to the above, scientific research have been on the high rise as there is
need
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a need
the need
to combat and possibly prover a lasting solution to the occurrence of
such
diseases.
For example
, HIV AIDS, Malaria, and the most recent Corona virus which has claimed over six million lives globally needs to be cured. In the same vein, the cost of providing treatment to these infections
are
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is
quite expensive as
government
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the government
needs to expend more funds to combat these diseases.
This
has led to some sectors of the
economy
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economy, such
such
as sports, Arts, Tourism suffer huge setbacks as most often, there is usually not sufficient funding to go round.
However
, health education in forms of sensitization and creating awareness amongst the citizens will go a long way in the reduction and possible eradication of these diseases. Take
for
instance people
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instance, people
are advised to maintain utmost hygiene by educating them on various safety tips through the use of televisions, radio programs and announcements, billboards and handbills and in the case of rural communities through the traditional rulers and town criers.
Furthermore
, eating
balanced diet
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a balanced diet
such
as a meal with
combination
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a combination
of vegetables and fruits is
also
advised.
In addition
, performing daily exercises is
also
useful in achieving optimal health and overall
wellbeing
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well being
. In conclusion, I believe informative education which is a form of prevention is cheaper than embarking on cost intensive medical
researchs
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
.
Submitted by Ibrahim Akannni on

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