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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
units
 of electricity production by fuel source are different in both 1980 and 2000 production in
Australia
 and
France
. The total manufacture in 1980
are
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 100
units
 in
Australia
 and 90
units
 in
France
.
On the other hand
, the total manufacture in 2000
are
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is
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 170
units
 in
Australia
 and 180
units
 in
France
.
Hence
, there
is
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are
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 10
units
 difference in both countries in 2 different years.
Firstly
, the pie chart
in
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for
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 1980 shows that coal
are
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is
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 more used in
Australia
 compared
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to in
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in
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to
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France
as well as
 Hydro Power.
Although
,
Australia
 doesn't practice Nuclear Power
in contrast
 to
France
. Even so,
France
 used more oil than
Australia
as well as
 natural
gas
.
Thus
,
Australia
 is using more electricity by coal, natural
gas
 and steam capacity,
whereas
,
France
 is statistically balancing the use of fuel
source
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sources
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.
Secondly
, the pie chart in 2000 manufacture,
Australia
step
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steps
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 up from using coal, 1/8 of steam capacity and 2
units
 of natural
gas
 and oil.
On the other hand
,
France
also
step
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steps
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 up in using nuclear capacity, 25
units
 in both coal and oil, and 2
units
 of natural
gas
 and hydro energy.
Hence
, the 2000 production shows that
Australia
have
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has
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 never used nuclear energy since 1980. In conclusion,
France
lessen
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lessens
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 the use of other fuel
source
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sources
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 and increase their nuclear energy which
also
 helps
for
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apply
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the environment.
Whereas
,
Australia
 use more coal for electricity and 36
units
 of
hydro power
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hydropower
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.
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