Some people think that old people need to live in special communities, but others believe they should live with their family and adult children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The senior members of any family, work like a pillar for their young ones. A few thinks that older people should reside in special social groups created for them while others believe that no place is better for their ancestors than their own homes or with their families. Describing both the views, in my opinion ancestors have a great deal of love and
care
that every family needs so to live with their families is the best what they can opt. There are a lot of social groups that have been created to provide residence to the old generation and each group is provided with the all the needful facilities and an environment where these people can stay by creating a bond with similar age group, sharing the same ideas and thinking
secondly
, extra
care
is provided to them by the members of these groups.
In addition
, they can live with relaxation in these communities by not holding any family responsibilities.
On the contrary
, older people want to live with their grown up children as it gives them a sense of satisfaction and contentment and of course it
also
benefits young children to learn from their experiences and ancient skills from their ancestors.
Furthermore
, these people can live with more real love and
care
than the arranged one. In the nutshell, Living in old age homes or societies have their own perks
such
as less responsibilities more relaxed and
care but
Accept comma addition
care, but
residing with the families have more valuable things than
this
as love,
care
and protection that you can get from your loved ones cannot be bought from anywhere else.
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