A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some mone

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the recent
dicsussion
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discussion
around whether the
company
needs to invest the available money into financially supporting a local children’s
sports
team
or into arranging open-air concerts. In
this
letter
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I will evaluate both options and advise which option the
company
should choose going forward. The financial support of a local children’s
sports
team
for two years will
psotively
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positively
influence the interest of youth into
sports
ascurrently
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as currently
currently
some
sports
teams are lacking financial resources and
as a
result
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they are obliged to collect money from
team
members to be able to buy required equipment. Having
this
problem resolved will encourage low-income families to
enroll
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enrol
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their children
into
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on
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sports
. Paying for
organisation
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the organisation
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of concerts in
this
particualr
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particular
area will raise the reputation of the
company
, especially if the
company
invites popular rock singers because
this
town is comparatively small and is rarely visited by
populat
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popular
music bands. Considering that there will be two concerts of
this
scale
then
it will have an
enermous
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enormous
impact on promoting the
company
. I would personally advise
to sponsor
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a local
sports
team
as it will have long term benefits for local people and youth, and will advertise our
company
’s value towards
healthy
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lifestyle. Especially children from families with unstable financial
sitautions
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situations
situation
will obtain
from
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apply
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more equal opportunities to pursue their dreams in
sports
.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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