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The pie charts below show unites of electricity production by fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show unites of electricity production by fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate Units of electricity by fuel sources in
Australia
 and
France
 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, the
amount
 of
the
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Natural Gas and Oil decreased significantly in
Australia
 and the
amount
 of
the
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Coal increased and doubled from 50 to 130 in 2000.
Likewise
, the
amount
 of
the
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Natural Gas declined in
France
while
 the production of
the
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Oil increased. Total production in 1980 was 100 unites and
this
amount
 increased dramatically to 170
unites
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units
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 in
Australia
 and the same thing is to be seen for
France
. From 1980 with 90
unites
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units
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 and a doubled in 2000 with 180
unites
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units
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. One of the sources that
France
use
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 in order to make electricity was Nuclear Power which was 15 in 1980 and increased dramatically to 126 in 2000 ,
in contrast
 , there is no Nuclear Power as a source in
Australia
. The
Hydro power
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Hydropower
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 remain relatively steady and increased slightly from 5 to 2.
However
 the production of
the
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Coal rose significantly in
Australia
 , it
remaind
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remained
remains
exatly
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exactly
same
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the same
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 in
France
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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