Some people believe that restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whether
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Weather
to
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To
renovate former buildings or completely flatten them is a controversial issue. Some people assume that refurbishment of old structures
specifically
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specific
buildings that require more expenditure ought to knock down in order to build new ones. In
this
essay, I will strongly disagree with
this
proposition. Maintenance of old buildings is far better option to opt because it is linked to cultural heritage and civilization of past decades. Culture and civilization of any country are actually the identity of any country and
also
do possess historical significance. By preserving monuments, it would be possible to keep reminding citizens about their generations and
also
letting them
connected
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connect
with their historical background. In short, preserving
old buildings
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the old buildings
is more likely to be advantageous for future generation.
Furthermore
, old structures are main source of revenue in terms of tourism. Rightfully,
such
structures
are attract
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attract
are attracting
are attracted
tourists
resulting
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Resulting
in more and more chances of earning money spent by tourists and ultimately increasing source of
revenue which
Accept comma addition
revenue, which
is, in turn,
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
for any government and eventually for a country.
On the other hand
,
eradication
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Eradication
of buildings is acceptable to those structures which are impoverished and would cost more for restoration purpose.
Hence
,
construction
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the construction
of new projects
such
as new housing schemes or highway would be
better option
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a better option
the better option
better options
at
such
places
instead
. To conclude, it is considered that
repairing
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the repairing
of monuments is redundant and should be torn down.
However
,
in
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In
my opinion, it is, rather, preferable to conserve old structures than completely eradicating
them thereby
Accept comma addition
them, thereby
safeguarding
cultural heritage
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the cultural heritage
of any society.
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