The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The pie chart shows that there are four main
causes
of farmland becoming degraded in the world today. Globally, 65% of
degradation
is caused by too much animal grazing and tree clearance, constituting 35% and 30% respectively. A
further
28% of global
degradation
is
due to
over-cultivation
Correct article usage
the over-cultivation
show examples
of crops. Other
causes
account for only 7% collectively. These
causes
affected different regions differently in the 1990s, with Europe having as much as 9.8% of
degradation
due to
deforestation,
while
the impact of
this
on Oceania and North America was minimal, with only 1.7% and 0.2% of land affected respectively. Europe, with the highest
overall
percentage of land degraded (23%),
also
suffered from
over-cultivation
(7.7%) and over-grazing (5.5%).
In contrast
, Oceania had 13% of degraded farmland and
this
was mainly
due to
over-grazing (11.3%). North America had a lower proportion of degraded land at only 5%, and the main
causes
of
this
were
over-cultivation
(3.3%) and, to a lesser extent, over-grazing (1.5%).
Overall
,
it is clear that
Europe suffered more from farmland
degradation
than the other regions and the main
causes
there were deforestation and
over-cultivation
.
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