the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The pie chart gives information about the main reasons why agricultural
land
becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Overall
, it can be seen from the pie graph information that
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worldwide
land
degradation dominated
over-grazing
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the over-grazing
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field with 35% and with very low indicate other section by 7%.
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land
degredation
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degradation
by
region
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deorestation
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deforestation
shows
high
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percentage
especcialy
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especially
in Europe.
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Causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
degredation
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degradation
deforestation and over-cultivation have
almost
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similar
result
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deforestation shows 30%
whereas
over-cultivation 28% in 1990
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in causes of
land
degredation
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degradation
by region very low
result
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ocupated
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occupied
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by North America.
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total
land
degraded shows 5% indicate.
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continent
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Oceania countries stay with 13% results.
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high total
land
degraded
is
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Europe with 23%. In
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over
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cultivation shows 7,7% indicate and
over grazing
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overgrazing
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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