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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates
that
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independent films of
different
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kind
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kinds
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Ireland in 2012.
Overall
, drama and
documentary
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documentaries
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 had the highest
number
 for release
the
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 film. From
total
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the total
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 released,
while
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only biopic was at the bottom of
chart
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 with the lowest
number
 of
movies
. At the same time
earning
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earnings
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 from
the
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comedy
was
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 the highest in 2012. As the graph shows, there was the highest
number
 of
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the movie
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movie
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movies
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 released at 35 for drama and documentary categories ,
that
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 was
largest
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the largest
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number
 of total reused.
Whereas
, the
earning
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earnings
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 from these categories stood at 8.3% and 2.9% respectively. Afterwards, 26 comedy
movies
was
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 released in 2012 with
the
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a
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 percentage of 17.6% since,
this
categories
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category
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 had the highest earning, at 45.4% from ticket sales.
By contrast
, the
number
 for
horror
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the horror
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 films group accounted for about 14
that
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which
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 was exactly double
than
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that
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crime
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, at 7. But there was a huge difference in their
income
 around
at
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20.2% from horror
movies
 compared to 4.7% from crime shows.
Moreover
, thriller
movies
 had only 8.8% of
total
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the total
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 released which was
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the sums
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sums
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sum
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 of romantic
movies
, at 3.4%
as well as
 other
movies
, at 5.4% in 2012.
Lastly
, only 1 biopic film was released in 2012 where the
number
 was
one fourth
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 compared with 4
movies
 of
action
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the action
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 genre. Meanwhile, the trend for revenue
income
 was
reverse
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reversed
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,
9.1
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with 9.1
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%
income
 from
sale
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the sale
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 of biopic movie tickets, higher than
4.1
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the 4.1
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%
income
 from
action
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the action
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 category.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, movies, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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