Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In our days no can deny
this
fact that showmen’s get a higher salary than people in politics. There are several reasons, the main reason that people prefer to
spent
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spend
time by watching movies, listening to music, enjoying good performances
instead
of monitor domestic or civics problems.
Definitely I
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Definitely, I
absolutely agree with
this
statement. On the one hand, with developing technological resources like TV, Smartphone’s, Internet, people watch more TV shows, concerts, films.
Furthermore artists
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Furthermore, artists
, singers,
snowmakers
try to do more interesting projects to catch attention of clients,
consequently
have earned every browsing by viewers.
For example
, the most popular singer and actress Jennifer Lopes made a film “Hustlers”
last
year and earned 20 million dollars, continues to do it every time when somebody watch
this
film by internet. As for
politicians most
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politicians, most
of their lives on monthly income without extra paid.
On the other hand
, most of showmen are active internet users, they often create pages on social media
such
as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter
,
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,
in order to promote
different type
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different types
of products like a clothes, meals, cosmetics and get an additional earnings from companies
besides
the main income. Unfortunately for politicians any extra payment accepted like a corruption. To conclude
,
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,
nowadays, majority preference of people has been
a
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an
entertainment,
therefore
entertainers have been paid more than politicians.

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