Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In our days no can deny

this

fact that showmen’s get a higher salary than people in politics. There are several reasons, the main reason that people prefer to

spent

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spend

time by watching movies, listening to music, enjoying good performances

instead

of monitor domestic or civics problems.

Definitely I

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Definitely, I

absolutely agree with

this

statement. On the one hand, with developing technological resources like TV, Smartphone’s, Internet, people watch more TV shows, concerts, films.

Furthermore artists

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Furthermore, artists

, singers,

snowmakers

try to do more interesting projects to catch attention of clients,

consequently

have earned every browsing by viewers.

For example

, the most popular singer and actress Jennifer Lopes made a film “Hustlers”

last

year and earned 20 million dollars, continues to do it every time when somebody watch

this

film by internet. As for

politicians most

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politicians, most

of their lives on monthly income without extra paid.

On the other hand

, most of showmen are active internet users, they often create pages on social media

such

as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter

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in order to promote

different type

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different types

of products like a clothes, meals, cosmetics and get an additional earnings from companies

besides

the main income. Unfortunately for politicians any extra payment accepted like a corruption. To conclude

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nowadays, majority preference of people has been

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entertainment,

therefore

entertainers have been paid more than politicians.

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