A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

#company #area #amount #money #sponsor #children #sport #team #two #years #concerts #feedback #-describe #benefit #-summarise #concepts #-say

Dear Gentlemen from

Sponsership

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Sponsorship

Organization,

Firstly

, I would like to think you all for the

planing

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planning

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to sponsor in our area which you requested

that is

the plan to choose either sponsor a local

children

's athletics team or to pay for two open-air

concerts

. In my opinion, Giving the donation to a local

children

's fun will be more advantage of the local community as for

longer term

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than paying for two open-air

concerts

. Because living healthy is required for society by supporting game's accessories to

children

who

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are

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not only the leader of the future

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apply

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but can push their parents to participate in sports activities. Some people in my area love to enjoy open-air

concerts

, but they can participate

these

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in these

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concerts

in only some hours.

Therefore

giving

sponsor

Fix the agreement mistake

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