A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my appreciation in regard to your decision to sponsor a local junior sports

team

or alternatively arrange

two

open-air

concerts

. Undoubtedly, sponsoring the local junior sports

team

will be advantageous for both the

team

and the business. What is important is that they will be fully equipped with all necessary training stuff, and it will enhance their chance to win competitions with a prize pool of up to 1 million dollars. Considering that your business will become more lucrative, your brand will

also

be promoted simultaneously.

On the other hand

, arranging

two

open-air

concerts

will

also

bring to people

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immense pleasure and some bands would

also

get the chance to show their talents. It is extremely essential for our culture and legacy. I am completely confident that either of your initiatives will be beneficial for our society.

However

, I suppose that supporting the junior sports

team

will have a permanent result than organizing

two

open-air

concerts

with temporary effects. Emotions after

concerts

will be forgotten while the young sportsmen will become our pride at least for the

two

years. Once again thank you for

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excellent support. Yours faithfully, Kao Mao

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