In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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These days most people tend to live in a big town and become more individual. While in

few years

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a few years

ago they

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ago, they

lived in

countryside

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the countryside

where they allows residents to interact each others in their neighbourhood.

Although

living in the small community has some drawbacks, I believe that those who settle in the

village

will receive more benefits. On one hand, I agree that living in the rural area brings some difficulties related

with

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insufficient accessibility. The circle of advanced technology

only reach

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only reaches

the

village

over a long time period.

Thus

resident

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residents

the resident

will face some troubles to connect with their families or relations in the other regions.

For example

, I have an interesting story while I was a student in the university. After

finished

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finishing

the 1st semester examination, some of my friends

decides

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decide

to go home earlier and would complete their administration after the vacation. Though there was a long remain

time

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timely

. Unfortunately, while they spend an enjoyable holiday in their

village

, the university authority decided to change the deadline of administration. I could not make a call to them, though there is not a sufficient network in the

village

. As the consequence, approximately a tenth of my classmates could not have lecture for that semester.

Thus

, it is evident that a poor of communication in rural area can impede our activities.

However

, I believed that people who live in

small

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a small village

small villages

village

will receive a great number of benefits.

Firstly

, they able to interact each other,

thus

create a friendly environment. Residents are not reluctant to ask for a help with their neighbourhood.

Furthermore

this

atmosphere can enhance

human life quality

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the human life quality

. People will not be involved in daily problem, as they have become a family.

Moreover

, sharing knowledge in small group community can improve their comprehension and make a great impact to

environment

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the environment

. In conclusion, while living in the small

village

certainly has negative effects, I believe that positive impacts

outweight

be heavier than

outweigh

all those bad sides.

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