Today's essay topic: People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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In today’s globalised

world

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in recent decades

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it has been an issue frequently generating a great deal of heated debate between two groups of individuals as to whether it is appropriate that people

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who are in some sport types regarded as a popular thing

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get high

amount

of salary meanwhile others

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on the contrary

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working in another crucially important

fields

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field

, are receiving less

money

However from

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However, from

my point of view these other members of a society have every right for taking

equal

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an equal amount

equal amounts

amount

money

from the government. On the one

hand there

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hand, there

are some factors that could be strong arguments against the other side of

this

issue why

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issue, why

successful

sports professions

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sports, professions

can get huge

amount

of fund on a regular basis

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Firstly it

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Firstly, it

should be emphasized that

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our

this

contemprory

characteristic of the present

contemporary

world

has developed as it is

now which

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now, which

means that it can be complicated obstacle to adjust it

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What I mean is that

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people

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over the years,

have been paying

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have paid

attention to that kind of sports to

great extent

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a great extent

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namely, football, which enables them to earn

money

by becoming at the centre of attention. To illustrate

this

can be seen by Cristiano

Ronaldo who

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Ronaldo, who

is one of those celebrities taking huge

amount

money

instagram

that is

harnessesd

brought under control and put to use

harnessed

by lots of people nowadays.

Secondly

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the competitions held among different countries or clubs can select their positions

throught

all the way through

throughout

through

the

world

that can be

credible reason

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a credible reason

why the winners are provided with much fund.

Finally

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on top of it

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it should be considered

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the abilities they posses

necessitied

the condition of being essential or indispensable

necessities

hard working for enhancing

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are

introduces an alternative

their reputation.

On the other hand

, there is a wide spread opposition towards

this

by the opponents

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They tend to claim that the employees of other

jobs particularly

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jobs, particularly

doctors have

crucially important high role

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a crucially important high role

our our

of or belonging to us

our

society

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crystally

consisting of or containing or of the nature of crystals

crystalline

clear that nowadays the

world

is facing

burning issue

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a burning issue

the burning issue

burning issues

called Covid 19 costing at people’s life

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The actions being taken by doctors with the aim of eliminating it, are more vital compared to

sport

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sports

proffesions

engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood

professionals

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should be thanked. In the absence of them it would be impossible for us to eradicate

this

jeopardy disease. In conclusion

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having taken everything into

consideration I

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consideration, I

completely believe that not only the doctors but

also

the other people in

variety

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a variety

of jobs should get

great deal

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a great deal

money

sporters

a person who backs a politician or a team etc.

supporters

spotters

porters

Wed Apr 29 2020

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

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