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The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Map illustrates two possible linked ways (Hindon and
Cransdon
) via the railway line for another
supermarket
 (S) to be built in
a
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the
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 city of Garldon with
65000
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a 65000
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 population.
Overall
, the designed plan describes
a
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the
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 location of
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 within
residential
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the residential
a residential
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 area just near the centre of
town
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the town
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 of Garldon, which connects and is neighboured by three
towns
 Hindon, Bransdon and
Cransdon
 via railway line and road.
Similarly
 , the location of
industrial
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the industrial
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 range is north and south. With respect to
town
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the town
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 of Garldson, most of the field is covered under housing,
while
 the three other
towns
Cransdon
 , Bransdon and Hindson are located from
west
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the west
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of
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south
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the south
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, northeast and southeast with
population
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populations
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 29000, 15000 and 10000 respectively.
Similarly
 ,
Supermarket
 (one) is located
at
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in
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 the southeast
along with
 industries from south and north with no traffic route at
town
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the town
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 centre. With respect to
Supermarket
 2, the planned location is near residential and the centre of a Garldson,
while
 it is connected directly with two
towns
 and an old
supermarket
 via railway line and all
towns
 by road.
Similarly
, the area of three cities (Hindon,
Cransdon
 and Bransdon) is named with
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cransdon, supermarket, towns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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